Wednesday, March 25, 2009

The Winner, Chapter 11 by Nathan S., 4th Grade

Chapter 11

The Winner
by Nathan S.
4th Grade

Chapter 11, Stone Fox
The Winner
Little Willy stepped over the finish line. Suddenly the crowd cheered. But Searchlight was gone and no one could bring her back. Her spirit stayed strong.
The memory of Searchlight was still in little Willy's mind.

Stone Fox put away his riffle and said, “You have brave
dog...Me wish Stone Fox dogs be better.”

Little Willy walked home. Little Willy took a glance at the farm. He saw someone waving in the distance. It was Grandfather, healthy as a newborn baby. Willy hugged Grandfather. The tax man was standing right next to Grandfather.

“Here's the money,” little Willy said.

“Thank you boy,” the tax man said.

“Can we keep the farm?”little Willy asked.

“Yes,” answered the tax man.

“We can keep the farm!” little Willy said. “But I wish Searchlight could see this.”

8 comments:

  1. Dear Nathan,
    I thought your Chapter 11 was very descriptive and it fit in with the rest of the story.
    Claire

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  2. Dear Nathan,

    Your chapter 11 was really good. It was a great way to end the story.
    Justin & Erin

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  3. I like your very good grammer and juicey words!!!! Sarah

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  4. Dear Nate,
    That chapter 11 was GREAT!!!!
    Aaron

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  5. Dear Nathan,
    You wrote like you were the author!
    Also it flowed nicely!
    Natalie

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  6. Dear Nathan,
    I loved how discriptive you were in chapter 11!!!!

    DANIELLE

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  7. Dear,Nathan

    that was one of the best chapters ever!!


    From Hunter.b

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  8. Dear,Nathan

    that was one of the best chapters ever!!


    From,Hunter.b

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